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chiraldream ([personal profile] lesyeuxverts) wrote2008-02-02 02:35 pm

Snape100 drabble: A flower in his hands

Title: A flower in his hands
Author: lesyeuxverts
Word Count: 100
Rating: PG
Pairing: Severus/Lily (unrequited)
Prompt: Snape's hands
Disclaimer: Not mine.


Severus never said her name again.

They were more than friends. She held him in the palm of her hand – she was his only friend. He had nothing else.

He was set against her gold, weighed and judged as base iron. He was hard and brittle, an unworthy metal.

His hands trembled, but his wand was steady. He would protect her son.

His memories were spread out in black and white for the world to ridicule. He had kept her – had treasured her as his secret, as a flower in his hands. Everything was laid bare.

Lily was not his.

nessyxsnape from LJ

(Anonymous) 2008-02-02 07:46 pm (UTC)(link)
I know i have an account here but i forgot about it, but I'll look it up and post a review under it. I liked this especially the line about

"He was set against her gold, weighed and judged as base iron. He was hard and brittle, an unworthy metal." I think thats how unfortunately many people saw him and thats what makes it even sadder. Lovely, babe.

[identity profile] gingertart50.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 07:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww!

*sobs*

Lovely. But so saaaaad! Poor Snape....

[identity profile] septentrion1970.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 08:18 pm (UTC)(link)
That's our Severus, always so loyal in spite of all.

[identity profile] septentrion1970.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 08:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Er, I made a mistake in the icon. This is the one I had in mind.

[identity profile] celandineb.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 08:44 pm (UTC)(link)
That's just lovely.

[identity profile] deeble.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 08:51 pm (UTC)(link)
Holy cow. Every single paragraph is powerful.

[identity profile] sweetmelodykiss.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 09:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww, how lovely and sad.

[identity profile] torino10154.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 10:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Gosh, that's incredible. Every word is perfect.

[identity profile] zephyr_macabee.insanejournal.com 2008-02-02 11:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Poor Severus, she was not worthy of such devotion.

[identity profile] angela_snape.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 12:35 am (UTC)(link)
This is fantastic! I love this line:

He was set against her gold, weighed and judged as base iron. He was hard and brittle, an unworthy metal.

[identity profile] themadscriptor.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 12:42 am (UTC)(link)
Such a perfectly concise way of describing the Severus/Lily tragedy. I especially like the "metal" line, 'cause it makes me think of the homophone metal/mettle, and it enhances the meaning.

Lovely.

[identity profile] alwaysasnapefan.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 01:59 am (UTC)(link)
Absolutely love it! So beautiful.

[identity profile] entrenous88.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 03:23 am (UTC)(link)
So sad -- his life is so stark, but for a time, he knew such beauty. Really powerful.

(Anonymous) 2008-02-03 05:49 am (UTC)(link)
This is a powerful, brilliant piece of writing.
samantha vimes

[identity profile] iulia_linnea.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 08:26 am (UTC)(link)
This is powerful and gorgeous. *sniff*

[identity profile] dianamoon.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 08:47 am (UTC)(link)
Aww, this was beautiful and sad.

[identity profile] nimrod_9.insanejournal.com 2008-02-03 11:46 am (UTC)(link)
Wah! and beautiful all the same!

[identity profile] alisanne.insanejournal.com 2008-02-04 01:32 am (UTC)(link)
*sobs*
Oh honey, that's simply gorgeous!